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she drops under the table and covers her ears.
she doesn't want to hear the echoes of their deaths
or feel the blood splashing her face.
she sweeps her consciousness into a neat little corner
with a fragile and slender broom,
trying not to lose her only slice of sanity.
she protects it with her small, already-broken body.



a demented intruder holds her lungs in his oversized hands,
only to drop them, letting the organs shatter on the floor
with the spines and tracheae of the innocents.
this isn't much, but it's something for both the aurora and sandy hook elementary shooting victims, as well as anyone who has ever faced this.
they didn't deserve this. no one does. [especially not children.]
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Blacksand459 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. The first thought that went through my head as I read this was brutal.

Such a tragedy. I was so heartbroken when I heard what happened that day, a couple hours after it occurred. It still lies on my heart and in my prayers.

Your piece says what needs to be said. Because the reality was so much worse and we must never forget the memory of those kids and their families.

Well done.
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MusicMauMau Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012
Very, very powerful.
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asianstateofmind Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very deep.
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MzVPain Featured By Owner Dec 18, 2012  Professional Writer
Your first stanza seems to capture fear as a child, "already-broken" and yes they are after hearing a few screams and shots, must be traumatized. I feel like this is a story and part of it is missing, I want more, I want more metaphors of the emotions which help us hold it together as we tell ourselves we have the strength to resist "demented intruders"! Very good imagery
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kamisch42 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It looks like the start to a bigger project, a really good project. Besides the large space, it seems like you're looking to put something else between the two stanzas, maybe? Or even two separate ones. That 2nd half is really, really powerful. I had to stop watching the news....it's too sad :'(
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sakredsoul Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
so many ways to express and this one hits a soft spot
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loveangel15 Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I have no words.
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blomn Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012
I have one: tragic.
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loveangel15 Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Agreed. This should never happened. Never God help us all.
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LaLaLaMeTo Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2012  Professional Digital Artist
oh deaqr god i heard about this and it waqs really sad ono no one deserves that not at all
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