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she was born with arctic lips
    and overcast skin.
    her hair fell like fresh snow
    and she was far too thin.
    her bones in locked closets,
    joints creaked and shrieked
    like a rotten floorboard
    under gossamer feet.
partially written in my a thought a day lifetime journal.
i'm just glad to finally have something to submit for you guys.
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thomarieforever666 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2014
de nada :) (Smile)
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arsenic-sea Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wonderful poem :)
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thesquareroot Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"her bones in locked closets..." excellent line
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Unseen-reality Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh dear, absolutely astounding.
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ocean-whispers Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013   Writer
Featured in my journal here: [link]
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leorabbit247 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
love the rhythm in this one.
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Blacksand459 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
As I read this, I could smell the snow in the air, and felt a haunting sense of melancholy for the girl...so beautiful and lonely.

Outstanding! B-)
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Student Writer
thank you so much! :rose:
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Blacksand459 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2012
I love the last line, very clever and well written ^^
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peterquill Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
this is the most gorgeous poem,
my favourite one that i've ever read
wow
i
this is absolutely incredible :") <3
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Student Writer
wow. really?
oh my gosh, thank you so much. :heart:
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peterquill Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
aahh yes really!! its no problem! ;u; its sooo pretty
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i enjoyed reading this free verse.
i like the style, choice of words, imagery and brevity.
(i'm so curious about this - a thought a day lifetime journal...
can you tell me more about it, if you like and have the time, please note me.
i'm so curious right now. and interested about how you make or go about journal. thanks.)

:bow:
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Student Writer
thank you!

i sent you a note. c:
i hope my vague explanation helped.
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scribblingnooly Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012  Professional
Just seen this on Mrs-Freestar-bul's poetry feast. Love the structure, the power of each line and the imagery it conjures.
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Student Writer
thank you! :rose:

i'm very grateful to her for featuring me and the other wonderful poets in the poetry feast.
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
your lovely work has been featured here: [link]
please take the time to check out the other features and :+fav: the journal! :heart:
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Student Writer
thank you! and i definitely made sure to do so. :heart:
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're very welcome (:
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012
gorgeous imagery
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Student Writer
thank you! :snowflake:
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2012   Writer
Your wonderful work has been showcased here: [link]
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Writer
oh, thank you so so much!
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2012
Gorgeous writing.
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Writer
thank you. c:
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
And the structure is lovely as well!
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Writer
really? i'm so glad that you like it. :rose:
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L0NE-W0lf Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
Definitely. :heart:
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2012
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Writer
thank you~! :heart:
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
You're welcome.
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Mochi-D Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I love the last two lines. : ) And the word Gossamer. It just flows nicely!~
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Writer
thank you~! :hug:
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Mochi-D Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
How did this get here? :/
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SingingNovelist Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
What makes my heart flutter here is the portrayal of her as something light and airy in the first few lines, transitioning into the second half, which shows her as fragile and almost decaying, like a rotten floorboard, and it sent shivers through me. It's amazing that you manage so much image into so few words. This is a great example of the definition of poetry, concentrated and heightened language, a concise writing meant to evoke an emotional response in the reader.
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Student Writer
oh my gosh, you might have just made my week. :heart:

thank you so so much for your kind words.
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SingingNovelist Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^ no problem! I love leaving feedback. I'm glad it lifted your spirits.
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winterkate Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Student Writer
My God, this is lovely. I like the formatting, and your imagery is beautiful. This is definitely going in my inspiring poetry folder!

I love the line and she was far too thin. especially much.
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Writer
oh, wow! thank you!

i must say, you're one of my favorite readers. c:
your comments always make my day!
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winterkate Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2012  Student Writer
I shall have to comment more then :) Glad I could make you smile, lovely.
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2012  Student Writer
:heart:
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MeowPic Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
this is awesome, the comparison of her to winter <3
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Writer
thank you. :snowflake:

it's meant to make her seem delicate and like she might disappear at any moment. i hope that showed.
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this makes me shiver. lovely images :heart:
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Writer
i'm glad you enjoyed it and got the emotions i was trying to convey. c:
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012  Student Writer
Flawless. This looks like the beginning to a lovely dark tale.
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mismatched-misfits Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Writer
wow, flawless? really? :heart:

and i may expand on it one day. c:
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IsabellaMichel Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Writer
Let me know if you do. I do really love it. :)
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SamiKitty14 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012
:rose: Beautifully written :rose: ^.^
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